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Yeah I think that'll be better, then it would establish a sense of distrust and confusion. Thanks again :-)

Thanks for the review! I've had this character stuck in my head for a while now and I just had to write it down xD Thanks for pointing out the ...

No no please don't feel bad I love these types of criticisms, I'd rather have harsh reviews than ones that lie. Thanks for pointing some of these out, I don't ...

Thanks for this. I do creative writing at college and a lot of my peers tell me that I get carried away with metaphorical language to the point that it's ...

Oh okay thanks for clarifying that :-)

Me and you are in the same position. I used to write a lot years ago and I've decided to start writing again - it's scary right? I know what ...

Thanks for pointing out the change in the tenses, I always get that muddled up! Thanks again :-)

No it's a screenplay

Thanks for the review :-D

Thanks for the review, I didn't even noticed those typos xD I meant hold :-D

Thanks for the feedback :-)

Thanks for the review! Long time no see/hear? xD This really helps!

Thanks for the feedback. I'm in the process of going through my story and editing it now so this really helps. Thanks again :-D

Thanks so much for the feedback xD

Ahh okay I understand it better now thanks :-D now I just gotta go back and change everything xD