RandomGrrl

The idea behind this is very intriguing, and I think you pull it off with grace. i float beautifully as you stand there watching Nice line, but I'd use a ...

Hey Kris! So so so happy to see you've put something up... As usual this is.. *hem hem* to quote the author "Sublime". There is no star, nor all in ...

I love Suzan! She's very likeable, and even better, incredibly real. Quote: Their mother was oblivious to their banter, staring off at nothing, lost in thoughts. Suzan could just imagine ...

Hey girl! Here for a crit... since you said you wanted ideas, I'm going to try and inspire rather than poem-bash or shred. This line: I take your flowy hand ...

Hello! I recently realized I have never read anything by you. That I can recall. So, here for a crit! "and wearing average boring clothes." Hem hem. "average, (

Back for more! So, critting as I go along: Quote: "Was she not meant to spot things like this?" This sentence seems unnatural. Could you change it to something simpler, ...

I enjoyed this so much! These lines I loved especially: "On and on, the heavens melt, to where no god has ever dwelt" Tiny nitpicks: "not for me, i am ...

"Terrible neglect lets tiles," Something about this line doesn't sound quite right. Perhaps the Terrible neglecT leTs Tiles... The fact that you have this repeated emphasis on "T" is either ...

Only one thing: "longling" at the end = longing. Heh, very romantic. No complaints! This poem seemed to throb with love. I liked it. *clicks gold star* :D RG

"Paint orchestras of sound within. Make musical heaven." These lines are my favorite in here! Very effective and also beautiful. Very deep! The imagery is great and this is an ...

"She stared, flabbergasted, at the acne-riddled boy who handed her trophy." Handed her "the" trophy? Handed her "her" trophy...? Missing a word. Simply not cricket, dear. "Crush him, burn him, ...

Right, first thing I noticed: Salmon crushed his chalk into the blackboard as he dotted the “i” in “impressionism”. (Love that his name is Salmon, by the way, perfect). Er... ...

Oh yeah, first crit! HA! Suits and vendors weary lean on Eh... "wearily"? Is this meant to be "weary," because that actually looks like a grammatical error. *Writing audience gasps ...

Woah. Just... woah. Big, giant, gargantuan gold star. Whew. I'm totally blown away... *trembles in awe* Woah. Wow. Impressed, very much so. No nitpicks. Very artsy, but as far as ...

hiking, but they don’t let me get out that much.” :P Made me smile. Hee. Her pointed face was curios and expectant, but not nosey. curios= curious other supplies in ...