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This story was really fun, but like anirban says, there are some grammatical errors and some bland sentences, but other than that, the plot was great! I love reading stories ...

Here to review this Christmas in July! This was a spectacular short story. It had the perfect metaphor and message, and they were both delivered excellently. The subject has been ...

Here to review this Christmas in July! While this was a good chapter, it didn't really make me want to read more. It seemed like a short story more than ...

While the story was good, I didn't like the second-person P.O.V. It would read so much easier as a first-person or a third-person (preferably a first-person. That beginning could be ...

I really liked this one! It was chilling enough to keep my attention, but not so crazy scary that it was dumb. It was well written, and the story is ...

Love it, love it, love it! Dragons are the single coolest things EVER and I was so happy to see one pop up in this story. Fantasy can be really ...

I like the idea... but clean it up. I won't go into specifics, but mainly focus on dialogue and imagery. I love imagery, personally, and any time you have a ...

Wow. This was really good. And its nice to find another 14 year old on this website. I thought it was like 15-16+. :) But yeah, I liked the underlaying ...

This was good, but I didn't really like the formallity of the language. Everything would sound so proper and... detached. Tell us more about how she feels. No, show us. ...

I love it! The part about the trees whispering... I have lived in the country almost my entire life, so when I moved into town, I miss stuff like that. ...

Welcome to YWS! You have a good chorus, but the actual lyrical part needs some work. You need a sylable pattern. I sang this aloud (as I always do with ...

The first verse, fifth line seems kinda long and awkward. Shorten it to something like "gives me strength to get through" I sang it aloud, true to my fashion, and ...

Welcome to YWS! Ok, I usually don't do this, but "Bolth" is spelled "Both." That bugged the crap outta me. Other than that, great story! I too, wish to be ...

I LOVE PERCY JACKSON! They are the books that got me into reading and writing! And I share your opinion on Leo. He is my favorite character, but he is ...

I didn't like how you would be using "he" and "him" and then suddenly mentioned James's name. The story would've read better without mentioning the name at all. Or even ...