Princess

Personally im not a big fan on rhyming poetry...espesicially every line rhymes.. this one was not bad though.. but every rhyme seemed forced... you have to let it flow.. make ...

Dude!!! you are a serious poet! This poem is the best poem ive read in years! where do you get such inspiration? i want you to pm me asap when ...

Hi! you are a very unique writer! now, to the critique...you need details! what did the girl and the guy look like? how old were they? what were their NAMES? ...

rhythem rhythem rhythem! :lol: if it had more rhythem, it would be the perfect poem! you have a knack for writing down your feelings down on paper. i should be ...

I loved this story!!!!!!!!!! if you are going to write a book, pm me asap, okay? :lol: omg i praticially shivvered when seb started to take her shirt off.. you ...

This speaks the truth for millions of girls all over the world. i love the way the poem contains meaning and emotion! i really feel for anybody who gets that ...

That is really deep. poetry should have emotion and meaning in it. you really showed both and more! You are a great poet! :D where did you get such inspiration?

This free verse is very unique. You must try to make your lines more equil spaced and maybe this poem would sound better with rhyming. :D you should try writing ...

You certainly use words most people dont understand :) but thats okay, as long as it sounds good, then its a poem. this poem however, was a little strange to ...

OMG that was the greatest romantic fiction story i had ever read! if u are writing a book, or have already written one, tell me, okay? you have some raw ...

Well... it was origional.. im sorry but that was the weirdest poem i had ever read. you should write another type of poetry, or write stories instead. im not trying ...

OMG you are a great poet! where do you come up with stuff like this? the only critique i have for you is when the girl fell, why did she ...

What exactly is this poem about? I'm sorry i cant see what it means. keep on trying though.. it sounds very poetic.. :wink: XOXOXOXOXO Emma

Wow! you have some skill! :o the only think i can say is that you said people fantisize in the begining of two verses. other then that, you rock! XOXOXOXOXO ...

OMG i loved it!!!! It has emotion and meaning, something every good poem should have. and it spoke the truth :lol: loooooooved it! XOXOXOXO Emma