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Re: We Are Experiment Prologue
The first paragraph is very descriptive which is great. I really got a good picture in my mind of what was going on in the first little parts of the ...
Jun 17, 2012 -
Re: Return of the Gods #1: Artemis (Intro and Chapter 1 - Version 2.0)
I do like this story so far but there are just a few things that I would like to point out. When you say: "We've protected the recorder with the ...
Jun 17, 2012 -
Re: woman
A very interesting poem. I really liked how though the task was simple it depicted the pain we women do end up feeling throughout our lives. I liked that the ...
Jun 17, 2012 -
Re: Just My Mind
I would for sure keep reading this. I think it sounds really interesting, and I would really like to see where it is going. The premise of the creatures either ...
Jun 17, 2012 -
Re: Mask
I could really connect with this poem. There are times in life when we all try to hide our true feelings behind a mask so no one else can get ...
Jun 16, 2012 -
Re: Home Sweet Home
Wow. At first I thought it was going to be a sweet little poem about home being a favorite place to be. Yet as the tone changed throughout the poem ...
Jun 16, 2012 -
Re: Claustrophobic Chapter 1
Very interesting. I like how Daniel's feelings were displayed throughout the chapter. It made it feel much more real. I also like how descriptive it was. It was easy to ...
Jun 16, 2012 -
Re: Nope
This is an interesting poem, though I am a bit confused. It flows nicely in the first half and nicely in the second half. Yet I don't see how the ...
Jun 16, 2012 -
Re: Eternal Ectasy-Prologue
I do find this prologue interesting. It did a nice job of pulling me in and I can't wait to read the next chapter. However, there are just a few ...
Jun 16, 2012 -
Re: My Gift To You
Though this is a very short poem it is a sweet one. Sometimes I find that short and sweet is the best way to go. I really liked it and ...
Jun 16, 2012
