Published June 17, 2012
Should I continue writing this? I don't want to write any horror, just 'creepy' (in case that's the only reason you think I should continue it). Thanks!
The sheets twisted in my hands, cold and thin. I blinked but couldn’t tell the difference between the darkness of the room and the space under my eyelids. Air; still, empty air; it pressed against me, the only presence in the room. It suffocated me, for I was invisible to it; and yet, millions of silver bodies pressed to the walls, glinting white showing where they gazed at me. Something was watching me, but I couldn’t see it.
The wool blanket could not have been wrapped tighter around me. It was pulled over my head, my eyelashes locked together as I tried to shut out the groping fingers in my mind. Of course, I knew they had never been there. My mind plays tricks on me.
Sometimes I think the creatures in the dark are human.
It’s just my mind.
Right?
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Go ahead hun, seems like you've got people hooked, and you've definately got me hooked, so just go with the flow and write!
~Wolfy
If you dont want to write then dont but if its calling to you all the more reason to keep at it
Yeah, but I don't want to keep writing it if it's just bad.
I would for sure keep reading this. I think it sounds really interesting, and I would really like to see where it is going. The premise of the creatures either being really or all in the characters mind is a very powerful thing. I am very into psychological stories so I think this is a very good place to start. I also think that you have done a good job not writing horror but also adding the creepy feel to it. Keep up the good work! I would love to see more on this.
I think you should continue. This really intrigued me and made me wonder exactly what the MC's situation was. And nice work on the descriptions. Absolutely Perfect. * thumbs up*