PrehistoricEchoes

Saw the third chapter in the sidebar and decided to read the beginning. First off, and I hope this doesn't come off mean, but the plot revolving around rigidly different ...

An interesting beginning. Fairly well written, as I had trouble seeing grammar mistakes. So what to look at first...? The World: Worldbuilding's always been my shtick so I'll just start ...

Well, this raises a lot of questions. Who is this character? Why does the cat Servus talk? Why's her hair a stain to her name? So many questions, an excellent ...

Anyway, as usual, you continue to impress. The grammar's good, although there are a few mistakes. The most obvious involved the lack of a colon in this sentence: "Oh, except ...

This is something I've been thinking about for a long time now. It seems we've said farewell to the good old-fashioned hero who did good because it was right and ...

Political philosophy. Always one of the hardest things to write for. Well, let's take a look. First of all, you present a very decent argument for why states should be ...

A very short story...yet...I like it. I'm not usually a fan of extremely short stories, yet this one drew me in (far more than some of the lengthier ones my ...

A very good first chapter. Definitely an improvement upon the former prologue. I have to say, this does about the same job of drawing a reader's attention as the former ...

This is a good first chapter. Sets up a bit of worldbuilding, but leaves a lot of mystery to be cleared up in later chapters (similar to the prologue). Definitely ...

Very interesting prologue you have here. It does a good job attracting a reader's attention, but it doesn't introduce very much other than the bare bones of the premise it ...