Poseidon

Hey Poseidon here, back for another review. “But you won’t know what’s happening in here. Not if you don’t know what’s happening out there.” To be honest this actually makes ...

Hey Poseidon here for a review. "After another few minutes, she came across a massive the cast iron gate, painted a bright red in contrast to the sharp blues of ...

"Novah saw the elevators going up and down to extreme heights and down to the bottom floor" This sentence isn't worded right. The first halve of it your telling us ...

Hey Poseidon here for a review. "The past few years had been though" It should be tough not though shouldn't it? "Unfortunately, Kou was not the world’s greatest liar." I ...

Hey, Poseidon here for a review. "and slowly eaten a bagel" This should be "and slowly ate a bagel. "the backyard of the old woman who was her other neighbor" ...

"Humanity is lost. War is eternal, and will always prevail." I don't really get this. Did you miss a word or is it the Will of a Human? "Allow me ...

Hi timmmmmy I'm here to return the favor. I haven't read any of your previous chapters so if i miss an obvious detail please tell me. The hall is like ...

Hey, I'm here to review. I haven't read any of your previous chapters so if i say something doesn't make sense and you've already explained it please tell me. I'm ...

Hi. I like your story idea but there are a few things I want to address. At first I was kind of confused because he kept saying Pokémon. This would ...

First off I love your description. Her thoughts jump around and us readers a chance to see how she thinks. I can tell that she doesn't like Obi to well ...

First off you need more paragraphs. It is very very very hard to keep up with your story without them. This is a big flaw. Practice this learn it keep ...

Hi, well I love the story plot. you do have a lot of spaces in between sentences, what's that for? Any ways you had a grammar mistake at the beginning:My ...

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Hi, well first off this is a great diary writing. I feel as if though man, a homeless man, is talking to me personally. I bet many readers will be ...

I like it. it was very fast paced straight to the point. Your description is wonderful. I liked how I could almost be there. You might be able to take ...

Grammer: I can tell you edited. Your Grammer is great. I love how you switch narraraters so smoothly. This is my first work ive read but it seemed like I ...