Pompadour

Heya. Here to finally review! :mrgreen: Prologue Like fire , the pain blistered across my skull. Fire. Fireworks. Arranged in bouquets, they populated valleys and cliffsides. And my memories-- Okay, ...

Hullo Deaniekins! Finally here! wading my way towards her as fast as I could manage I fell next to her and wrapped my arms around her. Okay, so I was ...

Sorry for the lateness, but I'm here to review now! Now there are lots of arguments on from where the bullet came. Consider replacing "lots" with "many." It doesn't change ...

Okay, soI'mtotallynotsupposedtobehererightnowbutIcouldn'tresistdroppingby,couldI? *draws in breath* On with the review! She looked beautiful, with her straight blonde hair and big blue s eyes. "blues"

Hey Mystery~ Okay, so I'm reviewing this as I read, and I can already feel the raw emotion behind this! Brilliantly executed. I also like that childish innocence you've managed ...

Sorry for the lateness, but I'm here now! :D To the review then~ Naomi’s wide eyes blinked as she saw mum and dad board the plane alongside us, as if ...

Hey. Here for a quick review~ I'll start off with the bits I thought flowed awkwardly, because if I start talking about what I liked, I could gush on all ...

Hey Tessu. Pompadour here for a quick review~ So, I really like the simplicity this poem of yours has, and the repetition helps the dramatic emphasis you're going for. But ...

Wheep. Back again! I went to the table, Naomi slowing me down as she clung to my leg. I dragged her across the floor and sat down beside my dad. ...

Heya. Here to review~ Technical My fingers squeezed on the sides of the pages. Hrm, so when you used the word "squeezed" here, it made me think of you pressing ...

Well, I guess I might just as well drop by and review this one too. ^_^ Page 14: Conrad's Tale I like where this is going, with the magicky history ...

Hullo! The character development in this chapter is spiffing. Spiffingly spiffing, in fact. While some may argue that Christian's, erm, indecisiveness is unnecessary, I think it just adds depth to ...

Blue! Back again! I love Minerva's name. It's like, the second I read her name I was all: Harry Potter! Except, you know, it's still unique. And what with the ...

Heya. Happy Review Day~ As the kids laugh Thought s of death lure into me Okay, so your usage of the word "lure" here was kind of confusing. Technically, lure ...

Hullo! Pompadour here for a quick review~ You vs. the powerful in a great race I think it would be better if you spelled "vs." out, so it reads "versus" ...