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Oh goodnesss. >.< I love you guys.

Oh goodnesss. >.< I love you guys.

omg lol that's not a review, that's an invalidation of my feelings. How about you look at the poem, not criticise me for feeling the way I do. I mean, ...

I am an angsty teen though! I have no delusions about that.

So, um, sorry. This is rubbish. I will attempt to salvage it some day soon. Maybe.

Yoda's right.

I messed up the title, and there's currently no edit button. It should be called War-Torn part 2: Addiction.

Thanks for your advice! When I have distanced myself enough from the experience of being forced into writing this I will try to go back and lengthen it a bit ...

Well, the formatting is partially fixed now. It is readable, at least, if not exactly how I wanted it.

Ah, the formatting appears to be completely stuffed. And there's no edit button right now. Don't bother reading it while it's like this. I'll fix it when I can.

Diary of a Bad Year, by J.M.Coetzee. It is simply beautiful and unpretentiously clever.

Thanks guys! Haha, fist I have no punctuation and HarryPotterRocks wants some, then I put it in and Karzkin wants it out. :P I'll try to find a balance. @Karzkin: ...

Thanks for the review Classy :) Some of that is really helpful, but I'm not sure you really understood the story? It's not about "Boy sees girl, boy is intrigued ...

That makes more sense. :) In my opinion though, you should write things the way you want them to be read, so abbreviate those words! Make them vig'lant, and fav'rite, ...

Okay, sorry my review was so unclear. I'll try to explain what I meant. He finds you when you're sleeping. 7 syllables He rattles on your door. 6 syllables He ...