Pigeon

I wrote this at 1:00am yesterday... I was like half in limbo and with insomnia so... I don't know... LOL Hehe, nice poem for 1:00am! I sometimes wake up with ...

Hey! I put it through spell check and there was nothing wrong :) but I think you might have used the wrong words in some places My house is quite, ...

Oh my goodness. This is brilliant! I have no suggestions - grammar and stuff seemed fine to me. This is so clever! I liked the beginning, but I thought it ...

Hey! I'm not really sure what this is about. Maybe that's the point, but it makes it frustrating to read. Individual lines seemed incoherent by themselves, let alone the poem ...

Hey! This is pigeon, here to review your poem :) air so warm but veins that freeze I love this phrase. It's very pretty and effective. Troubled dream, so cold ...

Hey Lynlyn! Sorry, I don't really have anything to suggest - I don't know anything about cancer or film production either, and I loved the whole story, no nit-picks or ...

This is a really beautiful poem, even though it's about an ugly topic. I love the images you use. The thing I would suggest is that these verses: I’ve held ...

Hey Jon! I'm not entirely sure what this is about, but I still loved it! It made me happy. :D The images you create are beautiful, my favorite being 'soft ...

Hey! I'm pigeon. I really liked this, but there's a few things you need to fix up Five P.M. and I'm finally on the road, after another long day in ...

I like the rhythm you've chosen with the five and seven syllable lines, and I think it's a pretty story, even if it's a bit cliched. Your grammar seems fine, ...

I really like this! It sets up a very interesting story and makes me want to know more! The only error I noticed was People—men and women—found yourself fascinated by ...

Hi! I like the basic idea of this poem, and I didn't notice anything wrong with your grammar, which is good :) Your descriptions involve sight, hearing, touch, taste and ...

Hi! I thought this was great! A sense of character is developed very quickly by the way the main character cares so much about his sister, and the situation of ...

Hi! This story is amazing!!! I absolutely love it! I just noticed one thing: But the bouquets only taunted him with fleet beauty that withered by his next visit. "fleet" ...

This is awesome and very beautiful! I've just got one suggestion: The TV flashed at twelve A.M. my room was dark except for the TV. Something about this feels kind ...