PhoenixBishop

Thanks, a lot of good points. I had to turn a slightly edited version of this on Sunday, but I can use the edits for later use. I now see ...

Thanks, I appreciate the in put. With what you suggested I edited through it some more and hopefully made it better. The story above has been edited after your review ...

Anyway I must add Stephen Kings It. Yes I went there. Some of his comparisons are too long winded and I can't stand his crass mouth. He compared the males ...

The fifth Harry Potter movie. Considering that was my favorite of the series, I was very disappointed.

1.Frankenstein 2.Lovely Bones 3.Bartimaeus Trilogy 4 Hunger Games( the book not the series. The second was good but I think it would rank like 6 or 7) I always count ...

Reaching out for a limb here, but I'm guessing you didn't like it. Haven't seen it myself and honestly never planned to. Now I know my decision was a good ...

Prince Tom's P.O.V I could just see her face. I stop dead in my tracks and stood staring at her, she was so beautiful, the very image of perfection. I ...

Thanks for all the input. I skipped over Tonyas chapter because I could't get it right. I've written it, but it neds major tweaking.

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In order to understand this you must understand Veronica. There is much more to her then meets the eye. All of this is really her overacting if you will. I ...

Yes it did help. I plan on taking all your edits to heart. God I really suck at grammar, because this is my second draft, ater two of my teachers ...

The Heir series by Cinda Chima Warrior Heir Wizard Heir (The best) Dragon Heir ( a bit of a disapointment)

I'm back! Sorry if I offended you last time I didn't actually read your avatar name if I had I would probably have guessed you were french, and wouldn't have ...

I liked it, I think you should introduce your character sooner instead of all the description. The slug comparison needs to go. Otherwise I think it was really original and ...

The First one is too much dialogue try adding in more actions. The second one doesn't make sense because you don't make it clear that they made up. They just ...