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  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: no more

    Is getting used to this new system. So confusing. Okay, overall a very interesting story. The writing is very detailed and everything is described to a point that I can ...

    Feb 19, 2012
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Shortchanged

    Phoenix lands for review. I really, really liked this. The interpretation of the prompt to your story is brilliant. Now for my little nitpicks on the overall. Writing. The first ...

    Jun 10, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: Removed

    Phoenix lands for a review Okay, I liked this a lot. Now lets dig a little deeper and see what I liked and did like. Since I read the first ...

    Jun 1, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Story of Sampson P Harrison

    Phoenix lands for a review Since this is continuation I will simply give the overall. Sampson did develop a little bit, but the whole piece still seemed to be lacking. ...

    Apr 13, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Story of Sampson P Harrison

    Phoenix lands for a review. I’m sorry it took me so long to get to this, but here I am. It seems the others got to the meat of it ...

    Apr 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Blood Is Red

    Phoenix lands for a review First off I'm not exactly sure why this is in all caps. When I see all caps I imagine a person yelling at me. When ...

    Feb 28, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: On The Porch

    Phoenix lands for a review. This is short sweet and to the point and I only have a few nitpicks. I don’t answer respond . Cut out answer or respond ...

    Feb 28, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Mind Reader

    Phoenix lands for a review Alec Baldwin walked down that dark street and wore his black hat and coat. He covered his mouth with that red cloth and turned to ...

    Feb 28, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Acceptance

    Phoenix lands for a review The machines she’s wired to scream her departure. This sounds awkard. I see where you are going with this, but the sentence structure is a ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: The Answer

    Phoenix lands for a review. My teacher said to never center your work unless their is a deep meaning to the centering. That would be possible for a poem in ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Dragon's Scales

    Phoenix lands for a review Zachary was mostly a normal, fifteen year-old teenager with teenage problems. He liked girls, listened to music, a few pimples every now and then, but ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Need or Greed?

    Phoenix lands for a review. Rob: Why? he says with a very disappointed look on his face. WHY? Personal pet peeve of mine. Don't put any word in all caps. ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: A Baby; a Mom; One Choice; One Regret

    Phoenix lands for a review I stand small on the concrete step that has lodged itself in my memory. It is where I told Jass I loved him, where I ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Tightrope

    Phoenix lands for a review I'm not great with poetry reviews, but I will give you my general outlook on the poem. I liked the idea of this poem. I ...

    Feb 27, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: A Growing Catastrophe

    Phoenix lands for a review Writing :Okay, the major problem of this piece is what is known as "The talking head" This is when little desciption is given and thus ...

    Feb 26, 2011


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