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  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Two Years Ago

    thanks man, I hope you're doing good. As for the grammar mistake, I had a feeling it would get confused. My fault entirely I removed some punctuation from it. "You ...

    Jun 10, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Two Years Ago

    thanks for the review, glad you liked it and yes this is all true.

    Jun 10, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Humor Re: Poetry is dead

    I appreciate your feedback I like your poems though. It's under the humor tag, kinda supposed to be a joke. It highlights what I think are some problems. Perhaps I ...

    Mar 22, 2016
  • Poetry » General, Humor Re: Poetry is dead

    What?

    Mar 22, 2016
  • Short Story » Horror, Supernatural Re: A Straw Man On Rolling Tides

    Oh also it doesn't have much of a plot or anything, it's just a guy performing a ritual sacrifice to summon something scary from the sea.

    Mar 14, 2016
  • Short Story » Horror, Supernatural Re: A Straw Man On Rolling Tides

    Thanks for the feedback, and for the compliments :D I really went all in on the description here, throwing out any concepts of dialogue or plot, just all description. My ...

    Mar 14, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Dramatic Re: Star Shade, Chapter 1: Oblivion On The Horizon

    thanks for the final review :D I agree that I should have more dialogue in the first two chapters, which are balefully short on dialogue. I kinda wanted the audience ...

    Mar 13, 2016
  • Short Story » Horror, Supernatural Re: A Straw Man On Rolling Tides

    thanks for the feedback, glad you liked it and I'll touch up on those errors right away.

    Mar 12, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Action / Adventure Re: Elodie Bones: Chapter 3: Back Into The Night

    clearly I've woken a sleeping giant here so I'll just step out slowly. I remember all that but it isn't so apparent. I wouldn't consider her following the man a ...

    Mar 12, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Realistic Re: Runs in the Blood (Ch. 1)

    Yeah definitely, the boy is a lot more realistic of a character. The girl has the correct reactions for her personality and everything.The chapter is a lot more descriptive as ...

    Mar 12, 2016
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: Seven Days Of Life

    Thanks, I never asked for his help.

    Mar 11, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Dramatic Re: Star Shade, Chapter 2: Death on the High

    thanks for the review, I appreciate it :D I'm glad in particular you liked the thought process of Garett. You should submit this a review,it was helpful enough.

    Mar 11, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Dramatic Re: Star Shade, Chapter 1: Oblivion On The Horizon

    Thanks so much for the review, you're too kind ^-^ And as for the word count, I'm sorry to say it is my shortest chapter as of yet. As for ...

    Mar 9, 2016
  • Poetry » Fanfiction, General Re: iv - filters

    Ok, feedback time. I really like this poem, it has clever references to doctor who. And while I feel I am a pretty hardcore fan I still feel like I ...

    Mar 9, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Action / Adventure Re: Elodie Bones: Chapter 2: The Old & The New

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    Ok, review time. After reading it all I will give you some hopefully helpful general comments first. You need to be careful about developing your character, because she's shaping up ...

    Mar 7, 2016


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