Pernicus

time to review this. I like this story's twist, despite being a very short story it still had somewhat of a twist. I like the commentary this twist makes on ...

Honest Review: I liked this poem and the message it intends to spread but I have my criticisms of the method. I will start with some likes though. The message ...

I will give you an honest review. First off, the overview: The first thing I noticed was how serious and meaningful this poem is. It deals with very mature themes. ...

Hi, I'm here for another review and I'll try to be constructive this time. First of all the story. I thought this chapter opened the audience to a lot of ...

Time for some nitpicks first. “Ugh, oh.” This should be "Uh Oh" without the comma or G. Ugh is a disgust expression. I mean it's plausible that's what you intended ...

Again your characters are believable, and interesting nonetheless. One of the best parts is her internal monologue debate between the relationship she's in and the one she's heading to. It's ...

Wow, compliment time. Ok, you're definitely a better writer than me, in terms of characters and using description the right places. Your story kept me wanting to read more, which ...

Ok time to review some poetry. My biggest problem with poetry is that I can never tell the difference between a mistake an stylistic choice so I'll try to judge ...

I like this story, but I don't like the main character. Problems with her, she is a bit too perfect, she never has lapses in thought and never misses a ...

Ok, feedback time. I really like this poem, it has clever references to doctor who. And while I feel I am a pretty hardcore fan I still feel like I ...

In retrospect this is definetly a comedic story about an egotistical writer, the typos are too many and the talk of perfection is too much for it to be anything ...

Ok, time for some feedback. The idea is nice, the naming of the poem is nice, the message is nice. But the delivery is not, some basic grammatical mistakes. For ...

I like the way the story is starting, but I would advise you to be more descriptive, of the surroundings, the characters, their actions. It would help you draw out ...

Ok, review time. After reading it all I will give you some hopefully helpful general comments first. You need to be careful about developing your character, because she's shaping up ...

So here, I'm not going to be like one of those reviewers that starts off with some kind of feel good compliment. There is a lot wrong with this poem. ...