PenguinAttack

A wonderfully and engaging piece. As such I have given you a line by line crit. I do hope it helps ^.^ "Through the window the sun was setting in ...

Firstly I address some issues ne? "Buddha didn’t seem to realise the pity it would be to stain, wet or otherwise disheval his companion’s deft appearance." Comma after "wet" or ...

I would be too if I was dragged out of my 100% my-own-day to look at someone’s BIG red umbrella. Adding the hyphens make it have more sense, we understand ...

I liked this, simple and sweet. I do have some issues with it though; That you’re grateful That you’re friends with her or him, And "that" you will always be ...

Well now, I really liked that ^.^ I, personally, don't put much stock in punctuation in poertry, not really. And I actually like the feel of the poem, how it ...

I sort of like this. Haha, that sounds silly, but I am a little confused by it all. I'm not sure if it was just me, but this was terribly ...

EEE! Lol, I loved that! It made me giggle from the second I started it! However I have a few little qualms. Most of these, all of these actually, centre ...

I quite liked this. The repetition does get a little grating by the end, but it doesn't do much to detract from the poem itself. Soft and sweet, I like ...

I don't exactly know what to think of this. While I think it is interesting you move from past tense description, or at least no dialogue, just tleling us what ...

I agree with all issues that have been raised so far, although I did find it rather hilarious you were writing about Halo3. I think that your use of Ethan ...

Ahhh LizzyG; Cliches exist because they are so very relate-able to the human being ^.^ Thus while your poem may be a cliche it is merely because it selects and ...

I like this, it is short and to the point, a little ambiguous but it doesnt take away from the meaning or from the reading - this is good ^.^ ...

Okay ^.^ To start, I am intrigued to know more, and I do like the story itself. I do, however, have some issues: You use repetition alot, while this can ...

I like this, very sweet ^.^ One problem comes here : "We had to say goodbye, They are harder than Hellos, But after a short time, I finally let you ...

In the most basic of senses, I thought I would like it, I don't think I did. I know that sounds rather indecisive but I like the concept, I even ...