Run away from the Hungry Bunny,
He'll gobble up all your broccoli!
*Laughs* Thank you, Bunny, for eating my broccoli!
Crunch and munch goes the Hungry Bunny,
drinking up anything that's sweet and tasty.
Hmm, I think actually(contradictory to Penguin) that "spaghetti" and "tasty" rhymes alright, but I don't like the idea of a bunny drinking, especially since you're talking about a hungry bunny, not a thirsty one.
Look at the tummy of the Hungry Bunny,
swelling like a gigantic ball so furry.
The Hungry Bunny is unable to start moving,
and off he goes tumbling!
In the first two stanzas your rhyming was abab but now your rhyming turned to aabb(I wonder if people understand all this a, b rhyming terms I'm using). Why the change? I'm echoing Penguin.
Great poem! I loved it to the max.
Fye.
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