PenguinAttack

Hi MindBlown! This is super very adorable. I love that it's really just a motivational poem which is pleasant and not at all dark or unpleasant? That sounds odd, but ...

My love, So you already know I like this because I liked it while you were writing it. And I have to say that now, reading it after some time, ...

Hello, me again! So you're losing a lot of that even mixture of description and dialogue you had earlier, the structure of this is really lacking, where you have sentences ...

Hola! Even understanding the universe these guys are in, and the way their parents behaved, I feel like there's something weirdly wrong with what's going on here. There's this lack ...

Hullo! I have skimmed over your other chapters before deciding to review this, but I have to say that I did pick up that this was a GossipGirl fanfic, which ...

Hi Krystal! So you have a lot of spacing issues here with a lot of random numbers mucking up your line breaks, so I'm a bit confused about what is ...

Hi Kamor! I'm back again and glad that you had a second section of this up for me to look at. I, again, like what you're doing here and I ...

Hullo Kamor! This is a very interesting beginning to this story. I have read the Prologue and think you have something going for you here. Writing this in present tense ...

Hi Willow! I think the concept you have here is a good one, it's interesting and doesn't have any of the weirder ghost bits going on - no ectoplasm (iffy ...

Like Becks, I return! This is definitely much better, the action is quicker and we have a better feel for what is going on and how. The creature has a ...

Hullo again, Nats! I'm back for more, I'm basically voracious! So, I think that what you have here is trending toward a good story, it has all the right elements ...

Hi Nats! Again, welcome to the YWS! I like what you have going here, that suggested camp fire story of the horrible beast. Lake horrors are always pretty good for ...

Hi Audster! I think it's only fair that I do come along and review this, since you were an angel and wrote it for me! I think the images are ...

Hi Los! I'm always a fan of people popping out some poetry but I have some questions here. what's with those ellipsis? They're really not necessary at all. when you ...

Hi Audster! I promised you I would review this, even though I think you might not expect me to actually do so. But here I am! Firstly, of course, what ...