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Hi, PenNPaper here to review! Behind me was my older cousin, almost collapsing from her armchair due to excitement overdose. How do you know she was excited? Maybe she was ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! Okay, so this isn't really a story, but I find it great. To tell the truth, I don't know much about love. My definition? Plain ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! Okay, one thing, there was really lots of slang. I would say that you shouldn't overuse dialogue, sure, it helps the story at times, but ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! Really nice piece of work, I liked it, nice title too :D . There are a few minor mistakes here and there, but by reading ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! I have officially dating Brittney Okay so suddenly there's this word 'dating'. If the story is in past tense, this should be too. It should ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! Wow, good story you have here, nice cliffhanger ending. Okay, there weren't any errors I spotted. I like your description of the 'supply teacher', and ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! Okay, loved this story, Jet seems to be kind of the hero here. There's nothing much to correct here, which I spotted, so the only ...

Hi PenNPaper here to review! This story is way too short, nice cliffhanger ending there though. Okay this is just suggested(no pressure), I find that this whole story could be ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! curl ,thin The comma is placed at the wrong position. He had long shaggy black hair that was beginning to curl ,thin eyebrows however his ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! “But mom, what about hurricanes, predators, and who knows what else!” A question should probably end with a question mark. live.’ he If you put ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! here,” Said Small letter 's' in 'said' as there was a comma before it. Great I was going to be living in There should be ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! all." He A comma should follow after 'all', and if that's the case 'He' should be 'he'. Okay, good story here, descriptions are a tiny ...

Hi, PenNPaper here to review! There I lay There I laid would sound better. Okay this story was so confusing to me and it was too short. And I didn't ...

Hi PenNPaper here to review! I’m scared.” Stuttered There should be a comma after 'scared'. afraid of.” Cormac Same here. The last paragraph was way too short, you could have ...

Hi PenNPaper here to review! Huffing and puffing Memories came back when I read this :D , but still, try not to use this, it sounds to rhyming and doesn't ...