Pattycakes

Hey man, I dig this quite a bit so far! Very cool setting, and with an interesting profession to boot. I think your action scenes are really well written and ...

Don’t leave us hanging As a rule, not every chapter in an action/adventure story needs to end on a mid-action scene cliffhanger. In fact they shouldn’t. Don’t fall into Dan ...

Cult of personality Just a head's up, and it’s very possible this is a cultural thing, but, (at least in the U.S.) someone would never, ever , ever describe themselves ...

Okay, pretty good stuff. Some general thoughts I had as I read: Eavesdropping So, cool, I get how it’s used to advance the plot, right? But it’s sort of played ...

Good stuff. Turns out a little research shows Ailish is Gaelic in origin and in fact a real name. I learned something new today! Mark it I'm all about authenticity ...

Consider me the patron saint of unreviewed works, here to help you. Pretty suspenseful so far. Onto general comments: A sense of time I think one of my favorite things ...

I'm hideously late with this, forgive me. Thoughts: qu'est-ce qui se passe? So uh, what happened to the awesome description a la the first couple chapters? I was drowning in ...

The repair took a month rather than a couple weeks. I've been negligent. Forgive me. Onto the comments: So...Sophia... Much better. The little bit about the pub and the change ...

Well, I've been sort of acting as the Patron Saint of unreviewed chapters lately. As someone who writes a lot of long stories it can get irritating to watch people ...

My collected thoughts on the first two chapters. 'The crows nest' and other assorted thoughts on mariners You have Lizzie make a comment about the relative ease of being in ...

This review comments on all parts of the story so far, but in particular chapter 2 looked like it needed a review so, here! Prolouge Hmm, I don't think I'm ...

Cool, alright, I've read up to the end of this chapter and on my way through I had some general thoughts that stuck with me. If this review is a ...

Hey I've noticed a trend where when people write longer stories on a site like this the later chapters don't get as many reviews as the earlier ones. So, I'm ...

Okay and a follow up a few chapters later. I think I just have one big comment as I was never really one for grammar line-by-lines. 1. So, the characters ...

There was only one person who could call me at this time, right after school. -That should either read "is" instead of was, or "would" instead of "could". Alright, i ...