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Re: The Grave in Grandma’s Garden: Chapter Two
Hi there! I love the way that this is written, it makes it hard to believe how young Kimberly is. As I read this, I felt for her- confusion at ...
Apr 20, 2023 -
Re: broken sea shells
Let's see here. I'll try my best! "Long walks along the beach Isn't as romantic as I once Thought it was" First, let's address the issue of plurals. As I'm ...
Jun 11, 2017 -
Re: They Told Me
I find that I relate very closely to parts of this. The beginning. The lies. The father. The sister. From my perception of this poem, it seems like the family/another ...
Jun 11, 2017 -
Re: Lucifer
I don't actually understand this, which is weird. Are you saying that Lucifer is male? Don't get me wrong, it was a lovely poem to read, however I'm a tad ...
Sep 1, 2016 -
Re: a collection of summer thoughts {farm house writings in italics}
I don't actually have any nitpicks, which is surprising. (This is my first review in a little while so bear with me). I feel like I relate with this very ...
Sep 1, 2016 -
Re: Hungover The Open Flames
To start off, this is pretty funny. 'Hate' is funny too, but not in the same way. I feel like this one delves deeper into the satire aspect- whereas the ...
Oct 23, 2015 -
Re: Heart Break With Hetalia: Day 1
Okay, I have to say 'wow'. I love how well you captured the essence of the characters, because I can really see them acting in the way you've portrayed them. ...
Oct 12, 2015 -
Re: Cloudy Dirt, Kneedy Skies
Hey, sis. Captain Pan here with a review. Even though I haven't had any experiences like this, and you know that, I still feel a twinge of nostalgia when I ...
Sep 23, 2015 -
Re: A Chance to Fly A Chance to Fall ~Prologue
This is chilling, and it really takes a good story to chill me. I have goosebumps. Wow. Though it's a good plot, you might need some revising. Snap! I let ...
Sep 17, 2015 -
Re: Dear Mother
Heya, Memsie. First off, I sense that this goes really deep, and I hope the things you say in here aren't really true. No parent should ever feel like their ...
Sep 16, 2015 -
Re: don't never hurt Me
Really strong feelings from Pen, because I relate to this poem very easily. I understand what the narrator is trying to say, and it can be frustrating. I really think ...
Dec 11, 2014 -
Re: The True Essence Of Life
Hiya! You have a good vocabulary base. They way you word certain parts makes me really happy. Now, to start off my review, I really think you should change the ...
Dec 2, 2014 -
Re: Prologue (please tell me the option you prefer)
I'm starting by saying that this is well written, and the grammar is impeccable. The style really draws me in, and it makes me think, 'okay, so they know what ...
Nov 30, 2014 -
Re: Crimson Tales, Chapter 2.
Pen here with a review-day gift! HI! Again. This time, you're using a lot of your senses, the candles, the smells, the feel of the pages. Good. Supped- I think ...
Oct 26, 2014 -
Re: Crimson Tales, Chapter One.
Pen here for with a review, just for you! Hiya Raven! First off, I want to commend you on how much I relate to how you began with this. I ...
Oct 26, 2014
