Hello! Tigerlilly here on this fabulous review day!
I would like to start off by saying I found this poem very interesting. It speaks of a topic most people don't talk/write about, which I really enjoyed. One thing I found interesting was the hot dog. Of all the things, the narrator is upset over the leftover hot dog. Perhaps this has deeper meaning, or maybe its just simply a funny aspect to the poem. Regardless, I like it.
I'm not really sure I would fix anything. I really like the flow of the poem and the way you punctuated it. The capitalization seems to fit well and the vocabulary is sufficient. Good job!
Overall, this is an excellent poem and I really enjoyed it. I look forward to reading more of your works, so keep writing!
Points: 221
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