Palantalid

are you sure? no actual motive except a wish to write? that's good. it shows, you know, the way some writers, or poets more like, just innocently jot something down ...

ermmm.......i guess it wasn't a badd poem but i'm afraid i dont connect very well with it. i just thought i'd tell you this though- "I excepted you and never ...

hahaha... i like your style. makes you seem like a nun......oops forgive me i was talking about the above post. may your blessings be with you too. the poem was ...

Oooooooooooo....this reminds me of 'mourning becomes electra' but that's the musical, i think, so it's fine, or maybe it's a common phrase in poetry? i still have a lot to ...

using the name 'land between the rivers' you instantly made me beleive that this poem is about Babylon because 'land between the rivers' is a literal transalation of Mesopotamia ,i ...

what a fantastic effect. i was watching the apparent scrambling of the lines but it is a lot more than that. i couldn't see the patter you were using. this ...

firstly, congratulations on this neat array of readers and critiquers. you have something in that poem that reall strikes deep. as for originality issues i think it was quite a ...

hey now that's a great seeths with deception, ignorance and hiding in ltttle niches..........you've used some good wording. it seemed abstract however and maybe that is why i didn't get ...

man, these kinds of peices always impress me. sounded like i was talking to a lunatic. sounded good. you should write for a magazine unless you already do. unfortunately i ...

hey, that was great. it was just like the 'simple' you described in the first line. i also thought that maybe a nursery rhyme couplet rhyme might just have fit ...

hey, that reminded me of some poem i read before......like, well it did remind me of something. hmmmm.....i know this souunds strange but does the voice in this poem sounds ...

aaaaaaaaaah splendid. i used to do this with my shoes. it was an impressive idea. great class. i always find these types of stories startalingly amusing. maybe i could ask ...

that was nice. i mean it had the emotions clearly and you knew how to say it all. it gives the feeling that whoever its for will be impressed. is ...

that was surreal to say the least, like a murder on a fine sunny day with birds chirruping and all. the best part was that you didnt explain a thing ...

hey slayer, 14 and new? same here. never matter, a bit of correction- The cuirass had the crest of Solomon emblazoned across its front; a white hand, palm facing to ...