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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Poem(s)?

    Well, I said I would try but I can't promise you I'll come out with anything insightful, poetry... is not my thing :P But there's no harm in giving you ...

    Jan 5, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Angels and Vampires: Part 1

    Forgotten, here is your review as requested! :) You wanted a harsh reivew so first of all. The massive info dump at the beginning of the piece is a little ...

    Jan 5, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Are we all gone?

    Hey there! Thought I would give you my take on your poem :) First off, I really liked the first three lines as they were fluid and rhymed nicely and ...

    Dec 26, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Chocolate Dawn

    Hi there Herzing! Thought I might drop in my person take on your poem! :) Nit-picks that erupts at black bird's twilight. The first two lines of your poem are ...

    Dec 26, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Take and Take

    Hey there ozasatya! First off, I have to warn you that reviewing poetry isn't something I'm good at but I thought I might as well try and give you my ...

    Dec 26, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: deleted

    Hello there! I'll start by saying this was an interesting read and had me asking a lot of questions, though many of them were left unanswered. That leads me to ...

    Dec 24, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Blessing

    Hi Aqua, nice story! I enjoyed reading this. The description you've used is beautiful and you really helped me paint the picture of tranquility. I take a long, deep breath ...

    Nov 3, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Body, Mind, and Soul

    Hi LukanRinta! First off, a quick question. My molecules spun Her molecules spun? Can you explain what you meant by this? I also assumed this was a prologue. However, if ...

    Oct 16, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Missing Autumn

    Hi Loveless! First, I have some nit-picks :D The dim light that creep in through the window threw ghastly shadows across the floor. Wrong tense, should be 'creeped'. Just to ...

    Oct 15, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Amber-short story

    Hi Puppylover! (: First off I have some nit-picks. I have blond hair, and hazel eyes. I love drawing, painting, and jogging. I think you could re jig these sentences ...

    Oct 14, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Tobey and Adelaide preview (: R

    Hi, OxfordandOnyx here to review (: Okay, so first of all... I hate drinking alone. ...But your character is dead, (or he was not too long ago) so how does ...

    Oct 13, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: White Ch:3

    Hi lava! I really enjoyed this chapter! I've read it about two times (once last night and again today) so now, I shall drop you a review! (: Oh, how ...

    Oct 9, 2009
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Experiment F58

    Hi, OxfordandOnyx here to review (: I'll start of by saying even though that paragraph of 'deformed human' description was quite a chunk, you described that thing well- I was ...

    Oct 6, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: End of Summer, End of Me

    Hi (: OxfordandOnyx here to review, though please note this can only be an extremely quick review as I am off to bed soon! We were halfway down the street ...

    Oct 5, 2009
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: A Last Time...

    Hi! I just thought I would give this great story a little review :D Then the phone went blank. Bodies of Angad and many other were never recovered after the ...

    Oct 5, 2009


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