Oxara

I mean to not being hooked, if you haven%u2019t read any of the previous chapters form this novel, then that makes sense. And for the grammar and that... well this ...

I mean if that is the biggest compliant it is surely better than my last chapter, regardless, I can only edit so much with LMS, but I do appreciate it

I agree with you, and normally I would have tried to fix a lot of these things before posting, but it was around 11:40 and this was for LMS... Regardless ...

If you want me to tag you if I do let me know

Firstly, thank you for your review. It helped me a lot! So I didn't actually disclose this (because I wasn't sure if I wanted to write more) but I intended ...

First and foremost, Thank you so much for the review (both the praise and criticism) 1) So this was for a school project, which limted to me to 3 pages ...

Your not wrong. 1) I did focus on visual quite a bit because that is our topic right now (setting/senses) however your right, I did re use a lot of ...

Notice that the dashes are only for lines breaks cause YWS publishing center doesn't like me

Of course. I am trying to add new points as well as reminding you of old points as well! and like I say I love this story and I will ...

I would respond this but my phone doesn’t seem to be working...

Also something just struck me, if the ship is alive then saying "this is my ship" seems a little strange doesn't it. It's just a weird thought to reflect on. ...

Sorry, I don't know when I read sc-fi I am just a sucker for the most amount of logic. I just agh I love it, but there I do enjoy ...

Well I am really pleasantly surprised, normally when I open a review I am barraged by way's of advice, and not just someone who just clicks with a piece of ...

Well, I am honestly quite surprised as I feel descriptions are one of my big weakness. Same with dialogue. But I appreciate it, and In terms of the portal i ...

Well, let me just say firstly I am hugely grateful for this review. Now to respond to this just awesome review. So to the clunky sentences you mentioned. I have ...