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First: I love the descriptions here, they are very interesting. Second: I read poetry because I enjoy it, and because I want to learn more and more about it. I ...

Well what part did you get confused at? I want to make this so everyone can understand exactly whats going on.

Maybe we would get it a little more if you scanned the picture and posted it on here too. Other wise this feels fairly uninspired. It's kinda like, ok there ...

I actually love the fact that neither of them have names, they don't need them. I really think giving them a name may have been more distracting than anything. It's ...

Sorry if things seemed a bit rushed. I kind of wanted the first chapter to confuse you a little, that way I can have everything fit together slowly. I don't ...

Aww thanks you guys! I know this must be the most fantabulous peice of literature you have ever seen :)

I really really love this, it was.... well it was brilliant. Keep up the good work. That's all I can say.

Thank you so much for the reviews guys! You have no idea how much they mean to me. I did a little editing, and I think it works better now. ...

i actually really like this, the ending is really good. i like the way the poem changes from this girl thats a mess to a goddess among us. it flows ...

PLEASE REVIEW! i know this is kinda bump. but this poem is very close to my heart. i like harsh criticism that is contstructive so please don't be afraid to ...

Good points: the idea is good, the reader understands the message. Bad points: It's a little boring. You haven't put any emotion into it. Somehow it just feels a little ...

I try not to be harsh, but this really wasn't my favorite. It feels so forced. Compairing blood to ketchup just seems wrong somehow. It feels to me like you ...

I think everyone understands the whole writers block thing, but this is kind of lacking. Put more emotion into it maybe? Great use of words though :)

My poetry tends to have capitolizations in odd places. I don't really know why, I guess its just the style i like the most. Sometimes I use punctuation, other times ...

I edited the rating, because it is not rated R in this chapter or the next. Be warned now that later rated R is coming. Also i felt the need ...