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Re: The Tales of Ahberdahri
Hello... A few possible change suggestions :) "First of shepherd Sheh-mial, who stands so strong and tall;" Is the "so" needed? It seems omittable. "Next of the mystic mountains, Those ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Dancing Free.
Since you wrote it, I guess you are the best judge but I think that this "I am one with music, and music's one with me." should be "I am ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: The Simpliest Thing
Hi there, Though the topic is a bit used up, it surely isn't a crime :) However your writing could use some work. “Making my heart be filled” ^^ that ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: And Now She's Gone
Hi there, The story is definitely captivating! But sadly the writing doesn't do it justice. It’s not “bad” per se, no, but it could use some polishing. The biggest issue ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: It's the way of the world
Hi there, Here’s the review! I hope it helps :D I find it very “flat and bland”, as in, I just don’t feel anything while reading it. In my mind, ...
Jan 26, 2014