Octave

Edits/comments in red. :) There was once a girl named Ciel Courtois who was only distinguishable by the hat that she wore. In fact, I would have forgotten who she ...

So, Ty. I know you have a good grasp of flow and adjectives and all that shebang, being who you are, so I'm not going to waste either of our ...

He's snuggled next to me, alert little eyes closed as he sleeps. If he's asleep, they're not alert right now. It's not really knowledge the reader needs right now. Also, ...

Gryphon has done a decent line-by-line of this, so I'll go ahead and go for an overall review. I actually have no problem with the whole lights turning off thing, ...

The wind howled though my long, dark hair, Not fond of describing people in the first sentence. Comes off quite eager and a bit dull. stirring what I thought had ...

I have to say I'm intrigued by the plot, but I'm sorry to say I'm less than impressed by the writing. oo" First off, this would actually qualify as well-written ...

First off, I'm not doing a nitpick because as far as I'm concerned, this is one of the best prologues I've read on YWS! Why? 1. It's not confusing. 2. ...

Horror. >] I am so feeling halloween-y this week. The fingers of the wind were cold and desperate; Personally I find adding "the" improves the flow, but this is iffy. ...

*rubs hands together* >] A creepy story? Count me in. That horrible death, which was so pleasurable to my ears at the time of hearing the news, It's really clunky, ...

Hullo, Maddy! I'll be your reviewer for the time being. Let's begin, shall we? :) I knelt down on all fours, and was greeted with th e sharp, acid tang ...

Hey there Scratch! Given I've been reading King's Nightmares and Dreamscapes + rereading Nabokov's Lolita, I've a little taste for darker fiction these days. >] Guess you could say I'm ...

A fairytale rewrite! *throws Pokeball* (>> Sorry. I think the heat's getting to me.) Anyway, on to the review. :) Comments will be in red, awkward sections in green, and ...

Okay, I liked the first one, so naturally, I clicked this one with some apprehension. I'm not big on sequels mostly because the sequels tend to kill my impression of ...

I'm supposed to be studying, but I took the time to sneak out and review. ;D So Perse, let's get started, yes? They were doomsday. This sentence is weird, but ...

Hey Kyou! I'm here to offer up a few points, but I'll skip the line by line review because honestly, I've no time for it right now. First up, you ...