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Sieg! This is great... I'm glad there's more to read lol A couple of simple mistakes, But this section flows a lot better then they have been. Very intriguing.... Poor ...

Mat! It is a momentous moment... I AM critting... lol anyway... I hope they find kristie and make her suffer... murdering pigeons! the horror! Lmao nah really this is a ...

I haven't played war hammer but I understood... I like it! maybe, for us who haven't played the game, a little description of the orks and maybe, in a later ...

Go politics! :lol: I like it. Not what you see every day. lol hehe I'm bad at reviewing.... But anyway... It's good. Very original. Not surprising, coming from you....

I liked it... but a few impracticalities. Rape victims are more ashamed about what's happening then being able to talk to strangers. And the meeting seems very up-front. Most meetings ...

I liked it... But as always, work on the flow. Try reading it aloud and putting commas where you naturally pause. Great storyline, And he did seem depressed. Have you ...

It's great. One thing, If she wants alex to save her, why does she go on about Eolen? and watch the sentence length. Long sentences often need commas to give ...

Oh man... I love it! Controversy is something that fascinates me, and religious controversy even more so! I don't think it's too gory, I read much worse all the time ...

oh... how true. I can spend an hour on a couple of paragraphs. The words just don't come out right! Very nice. I can't write poems... they deteriorate into stories ...

I like it, and want to read more. But remember to keep sentences short when dealing with action-filled scenes. And chapters can be any length in my opinion lol. I ...

Comma is ','. I'm pretty sure you mean coma. :wink: painting on the floor- panting? But apart from that, It's a great story. I'll be looking for updates. Au revior! ...

Okay... well, I'm not going to point out the grammer. (they have done that already I'm sure) But I'm interested. A story about a circus preformer? Not one of the ...

fantasy is gooooooooooooooooood! :lol: Nah, I love it. Not too much description either. That always annoys me. I'm not one to go through and pick out grammer errors, so I'll ...

I enjoyed it. It was a bit confusing... It jumped around a lot. What is the relevance of the jester? Interesting, making Aries the guy. And is Cleo linked to ...

In that lat conversation... Who was who exactly? Was maggie the one with a guy after her? or was it rebecca? And read through I've spotted HEAPS of simple mistakes. ...