Noelle

Hi there! I sing some things randomly, but I'm not brave enough to actually write them down! They're usually horrible. ^_^ Your piece is great. I enjoyed reading it and ...

Hi there! I really enjoyed this. It seems like a great start. Is it going to be a novel? I can't wait to read more! The characters are solid and ...

Hi there! My corrections/suggestions are in bold Dark emotions, battle scarred. He walked in the shadows of death. The broken one with eyes so hollow, For justice and love he ...

Hi there! In the far, far distance he could almost see a glimmer that was the city, but that was a place they only went to on special occasion s ...

Hi there! This was a very good piece and I felt like I was getting inside Nik's head. You did a great job describing him and his feelings toward his ...

Hi there! You did a fine job with this piece. Your main character was very relatable and his situation was understandable. The romantic part of the piece was good as ...

Hi there! I like this. It's original, not like any other 'I'm gonna go out and do my own thing' song I've heard. There were a few spots that I ...

Hi there! This was really good. It pulled me in, kept me reading. The characters were interesting, but I would've liked to know more about them. Why did they have ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! This is a great start. I'm glad that you didn't make the prolouge a whole seperate post since it was so short. It fit in ...

Hi there! This was a really good piece, but I definitely think there are too many cuss words in it. I understand what you were going for, but you could've ...

Hi there! This was a very good read. You deveolped your character very well and even had me feeling bad for her. Your descriptions were good, quite realistic actually. I'm ...

Hi there! This was a great piece. I liked how you made Natalia think Jesus was a stalker. It added to the suprise she felt when she realized who He ...

Hi there! I'll start off by saying I can tell you put a lot of emotion into this piece. You did a great job displaying the anger and you described ...

Hi there! Wow...this was great! It pulled me in and kept me reading right through to the end. I think you should get inside Charlotte's mind more, tell us what ...

Hi there! This was a great story. I felt like I was actually in the character's head and I could feel the pain he felt. I like how you looked ...