Noelle

Hi there! This poem is great! It's reads very well and I can't find a place where the flow falters. You don't have very much imagery, but it works out ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! My corrections are in violet below. No one knew it was Lee’s her birthday and she Lee liked it that way; less attention. If you ...

Hi there! This is a great beginning. I like how you wrote this more of like a poem than a story. It's different. Most prolouges are in story form and ...

Hi there! I am a gym rat, I take offense to this! Nah, I'm kidding. :) Although as a college athlete, I probably will feel this way in a couple ...

Hi there! Let me start off by saying that there is an awful lot of imagery in this. When I started reading this I thought there was a good bit ...

Hi there! I really like you're opening. It's great how you started out with S telling Kait top end it. Once you said that, the reader was pulled in. They're ...

Hi there! So, here's some comments I have: I see it all again: the melancholy way he spoke at our last meeting, that night where I had to pick him ...

Hi there! Wow...this is great! I love the way you really got into your character's head and showed us what was happening through his eyes. Your descriptions are great and ...

Hi there! Wow...this is great! I absolutely love this poem. The flow of this is great. It has a definite rhythm to it and I could hear it as I ...

Hi there! I really like this. I know exactly what kind of people you are talking about here (you know, with the whole quiet thing). Some of my friends are ...

Hi there! So all the things I was going to comment about, Jash seems to already have done. -_-' So I'm simply just going to comment on the overall feel ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! That day insert comma here opening that that text message, was probably the single worst thing that ever happened to me. Just a few small ...

Hi there! This is a very powerful piece. I'm glad you decided to write a story about this. It's a very tragic event that I still cannot seem to wrap ...

Hi there! I really don't have anything to say about this except that I love it! :) I totally agree with everything you said in this and you did a ...

Hi there! This is a good start. Your characters are great, two complete opposites. You did a great job describing both of them, telling us exactly what we needed to ...