Noelle

Hi there! This is a cute story. In a good way, of course. My dad sounds exactly like the father. He never wanted any pets, but we finally convinced him ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! I really like this! I really enjoy reading narrative poetry because it's the best of both worlds. It's a story that focuses on imagery and ...

Hi there! You must have edited this since the last comment because you definitely have paragraphs in this. It is important that you have paragraphs to represent a new idea ...

Hi there! My comment/corrections are in violet below: This type of insanity is new to me insert semi-colon here incomprehensible. The light dances off his crystal eyes. Awareness is crowned ...

Hi there! A few nitpicks: The son of God was sent from Heaven to save the world as our hero and ruler. Some things I liked: He died for our ...

Hi there! Oh my gosh, I love your username!! Anyway, my comments/corrections are in violet below: Spring has come and all animals stir, the old calico is now shedding her ...

Hi there! My comments/corrections are in violet below: -- Amid the roaring waves he stood Amid the raging storm he stood Good repetition. A fell vision Hm, what's a fell ...

Hi there! My comments/corrections are in violet below: Verse 1: Daring you reach out, Depending on what you want to say in this sentence, it needs to be worked on. ...

Hi there! My comments/suggestion are in violet below: Though forged in the fires of mountains fell and born of a Dark Lord's luminal research these first two lines are really ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! From the first stanza, I was drawn into this poem. I love the beginning where you repeated the word 'books'. I know it's a small ...

Hi there! Welcome to the site! I really enjoyed reading this. I was reading through it and I just though, wow this sounds amazing. You did a good job describing ...

Hi there! I like this chapter because it gives me some more information about Oscar. Now I feel like I know so much about him and I can understand the ...

Hi there! This is a good story. I like how there's not much detail, so my imagination is running wild now. I also like how you described everything. You did ...

Hi there! This is a really good start. I'll tell you, I was drawn in from the very beginning, wanting to know what was going to happen next. You did ...

Hi there! Aw, this is such a cute story! I've actually never tried writing a children's story, but I think it's a great idea. I love how you chose a ...