Published September 24, 2011
Books, books, they line my shelves
With magical stories of faeries and elves
With six-legged goats and space-flying boats
To the subtle beaches and shells
They tell of violet planets and highs
Mystical creatures with ruby red eyes
A sparkling star, trapped in a jar
That yearns to return to the skies
Words that speak of blood stained nights
Where knives are thrown in deadly fights
Where the curtains are drawn till the break of dawn
Till everything stays but the frights
Tales that see the vampires crowned
The humans and victims tied and bound
Till the sun hits the sky and the vampires die
And the legend is buried and found
And of course the tales where the roses are red
Where the violets are blue and the couple are wed
Where the water it shines like sweet tasting wines
But you've got to take care where you tread
And sometimes the light from the sun is all
To make the eastern mountains topple and fall
Where the flowers, they bloom, from the light of the moon
And the fleckled night birds, they call
Books, books, my time they reap
Then all too soon I am forced to sleep
Where the lover, she wails
And the climber, he fails
And the daydreams and nightdreams
They creep
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Hello! Nice to meet ya, I'm here to review.
So, diving in, I liked this poem. The rhyme scheme, at first, was quite confusing to me. After a while, however, I warmed up to it.
Overall, I think this poem is quite imaginative. Good work, and keep on writing!
Thanks! The thing about 'got care' was a mistake (thanks for spotting that, I didn't realise). Really appreciate the comments!
I love the idea of this poem! The title is very interesting and I just love how you are telling about all the different types of stories. I think this is my favourite verse:
Isn't it you've got to take care?
And also you misspelled fairies in one of the first verse.
But overall I really like this poem!
Deanie x
Hi there! Welcome to YWS!
From the first stanza, I was drawn into this poem. I love the beginning where you repeated the word 'books'. I know it's a small thing, but that's really what grabbed my attention. You set your rhythm and really started off the piece well. You have some great imagery in this and you put good emotion into it as well. Your rhyme scheme is great and it really adds to the flow of this piece.
I really like the rhyming within the line here. 'Star' and 'jar' are a great rhyme and really give the poem something more.
So, this is just a small suggestion I have. I think you should say 'then' instead of 'and'. When you say 'buried and found', to me it sounds like you're burying something while it's being found. If you use the word 'then', it makes it clearer.
Overall I really like this. I can't wait to read more of your work! Keep writing!
This poem uses a lot of imagery and almost each line is filled with it. Thats good, because imagery keeps the reader in touch with what's being said. Which means that I felt and actually 'saw' every event that you have described. Looks like it is purely about fantasies that go on in your mind during the day or the night. In brief - it is a good poem!! And you should know that there are always ways of improving - keep looking for them and Keep writing
P.S :
Some corrections :
I think it should be 'got to care'.