Nightshade

This is good. The voice does a great job of blending a winding, stream-of-consciousness style with a vivid imagery. The first stanza in particular is really beautiful, it reminds me ...

There are five hints I see at what the speaker is being compared to here: - garden is filled with statues (statue) - begin to wilt (plant) - moss creeping ...

Lumière, Here I was thinking you've been sending me screenshots of text, but here it is and it looks the same. Is this some sort of new YWS formatting magic? ...

You have a nice concept here, with everything revolving around the monetary theme. You keep your imagery consistent, an effort that is made easier by the heavy reliance on the ...

This is well-done. You have a nice flow and your imagery is tight and sticks to its organic, nature-based theme. One thing to look out for is consistency of voice. ...

This is well-done. You have a nice flow and your imagery is tight and sticks to its organic, nature-based theme. One thing to look out for is consistency of voice. ...

I'm going to echo Dreamwalker here and say that the tone is off-putting in its pretentious apathy. There's no measure of struggle, just a sort of resignation that everything else ...

Hi GoaGreena, I liked this. In poetry there is the concept and the delivery. The best poets combine both to create something deeply effective for the reader, but for most ...

Hello there, This is a nice piece you have. It's one of my favorites I've read in a while, actually. As a result, I don't have quite as much to ...

Hello eastarcher, I'm going to echo Mustard's first point and suggest that you never lead with a disclaimer like that. The first thing I saw when looking at this poem ...

Hello there, Lumisir. I'm going to get the unpleasantries out of the way first, ok? Each time I read this, I like it less. Now that I've read it 5 ...

An interesting little bit. It held my interest throughout, which is pretty rare, although it didn't give me a whole lot to remember it for either. It feels like a ...

Impressions: - A whole lot of active 1st person for a poem where the speaker is voiceless and passive - "God", "I", and "nature" all so separate? why? - Everything ...

Hi Lexi, you've set a nice scene here, but I think there's a fair amount you can do to make this more effective. Let's see what we can pick out. ...

I wasn't a big fan of this, although there was one spark I found intriguing. My main issue was that everything was so blunt that it lost any semblance of ...