Nexus

Apparently I shouldn't be reading R rated but i dont care lol, while i understand the title being called Owned, I think you can keep your style wih a different ...

I love reading your poems lol they are great... This is no exception ^^

Good ^^ I like your "bad guy"

I liked it, though i couldn't see a total connectedness with faith, i found it more to do with life, but perhaps some could say life is fait, or faith ...

Wow you seem to like Star Wars alot hehe, it's a very good poem- I'm not a StarWars expert so I couldn't give you feed back there, but i got ...

Is No. 2 in any of your work?

And yeah i'll check that website out

Though sometimes focusing description in certain areas can be effective to make it more exciting, scary etc. However i think i might have failed miserably at that.

Thanks, I'll take that on board, while some bits you got rid i might have kept, i suppose I do agree with you on your general point. Thanks

^^ Ok hehe i thought it might have been mixed terms between UK and America or something.

I go to school with Arclight lol

No by Year seven he means--- Grade 7,

Thanks :)

I think that 7 year old bit is a bit harsh...

not realy :) just a random name for the protagonist