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Oh...what can I say. It was beautiful, it was perfect, and yeah, I know my comments are sounding SO cliche; oh, that's the other thing - your poem was so ...

This is...a butterfly of a short story. I love it. I love the way it starts in the middle of their conversation, but the fact that that conversation is so ...

I liked the flow, as usual, but I actually didn't feel very interested while reading this poem at all - which is strange, because I know you are generally so ...

I like your overall intention to portray insensitivity to others, without meaning to. I also think you tackled the matter in the expected way: coldenss - and though this might ...

I like this poem, but found it difficult to read. Both because it's written in small text, and because it's all crammed together. Definitely space it out nicely. The feeling ...

Overall, the poem has a sweet, mellow taste, but lacks a certain powerful flavour, that totally blasts my mouth and leaves me reeling back. I think it's to do with ...

Just like to say that I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem first time round - such pretty imagery, such an inventive use of words - but like Hypocrit, I agree ...

Other than 'Ode to Pancakes,' this is one of the funniest poems I have read in a long time, so I thank you for the entertainment. Almost a Robbie Burns, ...

What I'd like to know is if you know where you are going with this. It's clearly not as short as it appears - oh, no, the story is quite ...

I haven't read the other comments, but I don't care if I might be repeating everyone else: all I've got to say is - Hilarious. I think 'Ode to Pancakes' ...

I have also just realised why it's not a great idea to write rhyming poetry - sounds archaic or childish or like it's meant for children and so cliche. I ...

I have just read the above version, and from first glance, I can definitely say I like what I read. Just a few things to note: firstly, I think almost ...

Yes, I agree with Hypocrit, that you need some purpose BEFORE you write, but this throws up a problem: what if your poem is about not having any purpose? Then, ...

So far, it is a stream of consciousness, and that in itself makes it a grabbing start ('I totally forgot.') but quickly makes people skim over the rest, wondering when ...

I agree with perdido - definitely needs some reworking - but I like the content matter. I definitely think it makes a chilling story, and I think it would have ...