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  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Mother Earth

    Hey! So Widdershins already commented on quite a few elements of this poem which I agree with. The rhyme is forced, and it makes for an awkward, slow read. A ...

    Apr 19, 2015
  • Poetry » Teen Fiction, Dramatic Re: Mistakes Were Made.

    So, I realise that you have had some not so complimentary reviews. I understand that this ws a colab, and they can be really good at times, others, not so ...

    Mar 29, 2015
  • Poetry » Fantasy, Literature Re: How She Became Chloris(The Nymph of Spring and Flowers)

    Alright, This is a sweet poem, and I rather enjoyed it. But there are a few things I will like to comment on. First, your use of punctuation isn't consistent. ...

    Mar 29, 2015
  • Poetry » General, General Re: the princes of peonage

    Ok, This is good. You show control of your chosen form, and given that it is a poem of no traditional form that can be hard to achieve. You have ...

    Mar 29, 2015
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Science Fiction Re: Not Me

    Hey! So, this is an interesting and confusing piece. It isn't bad but I feel as if it can be fixed up a bit. First: It doesn't seem like a ...

    Mar 29, 2015
  • Other » General, General Re: My soul, for a wish~

    Hello! So, I'm going to review this like I would a poem or short story. I know you may not have posted it wanting a review but I'm going to ...

    Feb 15, 2015
  • Poetry » Satire, Dramatic Re: A Poem for the Old

    Hey! So, this is an interesting poem, and I really enjoyed it. I don't have too many problems with it, it is humorous and also serious at the same time. ...

    Feb 15, 2015
  • Novel / Chapter » Humor, Romantic Re: Compliments Are The Best Way To A Girl's Heart... Right?

    Hey, You are going to have to bare with me because I'm not one for reviewing stories often. But I will give this a good go. This is really sweet, ...

    Feb 9, 2015
  • Other » Realistic, Realistic Re: Forever with me

    Hey! So, this is my first review in a while, so congratulations you get to be the lucky recipient of most likely a mediocre review. Nah, I'll do my best! ...

    Jul 31, 2014
  • Poetry » Realistic, Culture Re: Dedicate Yourself Girls

    Guys, it's satire. And Ialreadydied has done it incredibly well. I love it. Seeing the title I was ready to go on a full rant. But wow! I don't need ...

    Jun 2, 2014
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Politics Re: Unborn Christina

    I really like this poem. It offers a great perspective on abortion and why many do it. It's interesting that you wrote this poem and Deanie wrote one a few ...

    May 16, 2014
  • Short Story » Narrative, General Re: Her Scars Sailed By On A Breeze Past Me

    Hey! This is great. It is a bit fragmented at times, as you pointed out, but it is still really good. I liked the ending the best. Now, I'm not ...

    May 16, 2014
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Deviousness.

    Yo! Yo! Yo! Get down! Ok, let's get down and do some reviewing!!!!! So, this is A+++. You have a great voice in this, and the simplicity of it makes ...

    May 15, 2014
  • Short Story » General, General Re: xxy

    Ok, so interesting story. You have a rather nice idea, but the execution isn't what it could be. Now, I haven't reviewed prose in a while so I may be ...

    May 15, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Fantasy Re: The Warning of the Sorting Hat

    Yay! HP poem! Ok, this is good, it's not fantastic but it's good. I like the way you portrayed all the houses with the good qualities, because every house has ...

    May 15, 2014


They who talk all day of beauty call all the plain things dirty
— John Darnielle