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Re: Mother Earth
Hey! So Widdershins already commented on quite a few elements of this poem which I agree with. The rhyme is forced, and it makes for an awkward, slow read. A ...
Apr 19, 2015 -
Re: Mistakes Were Made.
So, I realise that you have had some not so complimentary reviews. I understand that this ws a colab, and they can be really good at times, others, not so ...
Mar 29, 2015 -
Re: How She Became Chloris(The Nymph of Spring and Flowers)
Alright, This is a sweet poem, and I rather enjoyed it. But there are a few things I will like to comment on. First, your use of punctuation isn't consistent. ...
Mar 29, 2015 -
Re: the princes of peonage
Ok, This is good. You show control of your chosen form, and given that it is a poem of no traditional form that can be hard to achieve. You have ...
Mar 29, 2015 -
Re: Not Me
Hey! So, this is an interesting and confusing piece. It isn't bad but I feel as if it can be fixed up a bit. First: It doesn't seem like a ...
Mar 29, 2015 -
Re: My soul, for a wish~
Hello! So, I'm going to review this like I would a poem or short story. I know you may not have posted it wanting a review but I'm going to ...
Feb 15, 2015 -
Re: A Poem for the Old
Hey! So, this is an interesting poem, and I really enjoyed it. I don't have too many problems with it, it is humorous and also serious at the same time. ...
Feb 15, 2015 -
Re: Compliments Are The Best Way To A Girl's Heart... Right?
Hey, You are going to have to bare with me because I'm not one for reviewing stories often. But I will give this a good go. This is really sweet, ...
Feb 9, 2015 -
Re: Forever with me
Hey! So, this is my first review in a while, so congratulations you get to be the lucky recipient of most likely a mediocre review. Nah, I'll do my best! ...
Jul 31, 2014 -
Re: Dedicate Yourself Girls
Guys, it's satire. And Ialreadydied has done it incredibly well. I love it. Seeing the title I was ready to go on a full rant. But wow! I don't need ...
Jun 2, 2014 -
Re: Unborn Christina
I really like this poem. It offers a great perspective on abortion and why many do it. It's interesting that you wrote this poem and Deanie wrote one a few ...
May 16, 2014 -
Re: Her Scars Sailed By On A Breeze Past Me
Hey! This is great. It is a bit fragmented at times, as you pointed out, but it is still really good. I liked the ending the best. Now, I'm not ...
May 16, 2014 -
Re: Deviousness.
Yo! Yo! Yo! Get down! Ok, let's get down and do some reviewing!!!!! So, this is A+++. You have a great voice in this, and the simplicity of it makes ...
May 15, 2014 -
Re: xxy
Ok, so interesting story. You have a rather nice idea, but the execution isn't what it could be. Now, I haven't reviewed prose in a while so I may be ...
May 15, 2014 -
Re: The Warning of the Sorting Hat
Yay! HP poem! Ok, this is good, it's not fantastic but it's good. I like the way you portrayed all the houses with the good qualities, because every house has ...
May 15, 2014
