NaRachel

Hi i'm Rachel. First of all i agree that writing stories is probably the best cure to boredom. I like that its short. Its just the two characters, the girl ...

Hey i think its good you posted something from the past. I think it was interesting, it sort of made your stomach squirm at the first line, but thats a ...

Its really long but I'll review the first bit for now. The beginning is really eye-catching you wonder what could of happened to this person if they can't remember their ...

Hey i think Romeo and Juliet love stories are always sweet take Love Story- Taylor Swift for example. Yeah it is a bit cliche but its almost so cliche that ...

Oh my gosh, :thud: this is sooo good! It's really exciting, couldn't take my eyes off the story. Can't wait to read on and see why the girl is taken ...

Hey i love that you've written a poem about the devastating Haiti. Theres a lot of words in it that i don't understand so its kind of hard to understand ...

I looked at the title and had to read because i like the song Red by daniel merriwater too. Its pretty short. The lyrics aren't anything deep and meaningful but ...

hey i think its great. Its angry and its blunt and to the point. I think it risky having some of the lines not rhyming but i love the parts ...

Hey i really like the beginning, its starts really abrubt which is exciting and interesting. I like the theme e.g magic, swords, elf's sure its a common theme but i ...

Hey I like the whole storyline it seems like its going to be very interesting. I didn't like this part (Cassandra lives in California)! It would be better if you ...

I likey. Its good how you were so specific over what you were describing for e.g the warm coke and the converse bit. I agree with Demeter in that the ...

Hey I really like the flow and the different ryhming patterns. The way you repeated bits for e.g never can, never can forget make it really interesting to read. My ...

This story's getting better. I like the relationships and friendships that are formed. Just remember to show not tell sometimes. This means that instead of saying for e.g "She was ...

Hey i think this is good. You've put a lot of emotions into it. As for not being good enough well thats just silly. A lot of the people on ...

Hey i think its good, especially since your only 14. I like the start with Zoey and Kate debating about which is better Harry Potter or Twilight (which in my ...