this is my second post here. the first one is "inside your heart", and if you have the time, you can also review that one. i'm still working on this one though, so i really need your opinion. like my previous post, it also has lots of repetition here. 
firearris and durriedog: look, i've fixed my capitalization. haha.
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Someone to Forget
Hey, what is wrong with you?
You always tell me what to do
And my head is spinning, time is running
I don’t know where we’re heading now
Just say what you want to say
It doesn’t matter anyway
I’m tired of trying to be something
And I know that it’s hard living
Up to your stupid expectations
Walk away now, don’t ever look back
Cause I know I don’t mean a thing to you
I won’t care if ever you come back
And tell me that you’re sorry (that you’re sorry)
Cause for me you’re just someone to forget
So what are you up to now?
It did make a sense somehow
You got me believing in happy endings
You played my feelings with your sweet nothings
And I’m feeling so much better
Cause we didn’t last forever
I’m tired of trying to be something
And I know that it’s hard living tracing circles
Wasting time on nonsense conversations
Here I am, I’m watching you
(here I am I’m watching you)
Walk away now, don’t ever look back
Cause I know I don’t mean a thing to you
I won’t care if ever you come back
And tell me that you’re sorry (that you’re sorry)
Walk away now, don’t ever look back
Cause I know I don’t mean a thing to you
I won’t care if ever you come back
And tell me that you’re sorry (that you’re sorry)
Walk away now, don’t ever look back
Cause I know I don’t mean a thing to you
I won’t care if ever you come back
And tell me that you’re sorry (that you’re sorry)
For me you’re just someone I just met
Walk away now, please don’t look back
Cause I know I don’t mean a thing to you
(why don’t you go now?)
I won’t care if ever you come back and tell me that you’re sorry
(I won’t care)
For me you’re just someone else
For me you’re just someone to forget
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hello rachel.
thanks for this review. yeah, you're right, this song really has a SCREAMING part, but LOL, i have to edit that part. i'm glad you appreciated this one. if you have time, you can review my other post here, "inside your heart".
love to hear from you again.
`telle.
hey i think its great. Its angry and its blunt and to the point. I think it risky having some of the lines not rhyming but i love the parts you rhyme "someone to forget" with. I can just imagine this song with electric guitar and someone yelling it out.