MysticalBlood

it's your own work!!! ;) you should decide! This is very good! really gripping and i don't think there's much bad about it... just wrack your brains and I'm sure ...

This is really good!!! But this bit bugs me- I went in my room, picked up the same book I just had, and pretended to read it, but really I ...

Wow this is absolutely amazing!!! It reminded me a bit of demonata at the beginning... but it's not really that similar when i get into it... i loved it!!! keep ...

wow. this is amazing. so deep and it's just... wow. but it sounds weird when you put As the smoke, The blood, Covers your land Try to grab my hand ...

I really like this!!! But what kind of bugs me is that you used Jayden a lot as a sentence opening... try saying something other than Jayden did this and ...

In fact, we were plunged into something that I know now would cause us nightmares for years to come. I think maybe it would sound better if you put- In ...

I think this story worked very well. The short snappy sentences where straight forward and gave it a bit more tension in the story. You've a good use of words ...

'I had maids and dresses and tiaras all my own.' This should be 'I had maids and dresses and tiaras all of my own...' But overall, i loved the story. ...

That was amazing! From the second I read the first sentence, I was gripped! There were a few spelling mistakes but that was truly beautiful. I actually felt the anger ...

Do you hang on to yesterday's newspaper, believing it to be the rarest of all treasures? Accept the message pressed between the inkblots and move on. Today, new headlines will ...

I wrote this mainly for my NaPoWriMo thread, but I loved this poem so much, I wanted it to have it's own separate thread. I was daydreaming when I wrote ...

Helheim, why not describe Helheim? It is a mythical place in the Underworld, also described as Avalon, I know this from Tomb Raider:Underworld, and the dark sorceress in the game ...

Sonnets should have a ten syllable beat each line, I thought there was to begin with, but then it ruined it by too many syllables, try deleting some stuff. like: ...

WOW, that is really good, it rhymes well, there is a good rhythm to the song and it'd be nice if we could hear the song. It gives out a ...

I have been asked several times if I actually wrote this, and the answer is yes, I did. Edward Cullen You sit with me at night, Hold me safe inside ...