Muteman

Needs more concrete details. Give us a name/place/whatever. You should make it specific as humanly possible, then hack and slash things away. Throw in some (VERY few) words like love ...

Having 0 reviews sucks, so here I am. Overall, I liked the the fact that you actual wrote a poem about something real and solid and concrete, not solely emotion ...

Not saying I'm a poetry expert or anything, but going off the pros of the business, so yeah. I would focus more on the concrete. Showing us true blue images. ...

I'm assuming I know what this is about. But being a dude, I'm not that up to hype on that sorta thing. I wouldn't use "Mary Rose" so much, give ...

Nice, sarcasm in poetry, if I'm reading it right. Just on the general outline of the poem, I would mix the stanzas more, as it's two even ones at the ...

Well it's late, but better late than never. And it's not even a real criticism because it's a skillfully done essay. My cousin went through a very similar experience, I ...

I'm criticising with the assumption you aren't that experienced in poetry, like you said. I would look up some modern poetry to get a better grip on the subject as ...

Like the above person said, it's hard to catagorize this, and thus is hard to critique. It seems almost like venting, to someone, or maybe yourself. Could be someone you ...

The ending of the 3rd stanza is a little corny sounding, of course, it's hard to write a poem without a little cornballin'. But the whole 4th stanza is awesome. ...

I usually don't like criticizing poetry, but for my first YWS friend, anything. Usually when I write, I find the paper very rarely, if ever rustles. Rustling is for leaves ...

Wow, I'm a major historical fiction fan to begin with, and this was quite skillfully done. As the person above said, need to get the comma thing down. And some ...

Very nice, I like the use of more simplistic language. Can't stand when people through huge words in there. I especially liked "because if you did not believe it, we ...

Alot of nice poem language, patch, denim, slenderness, manic, for some reason all seem poetic to me. Liked the first two lines, why, I can't tell, most poetry is give ...

My first "review" so I aint gotta get all into or anything, so yeah. Overall, I really liked the story. I usually don't read other amature writers, so i don't ...