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Mr.Knightley

  • Short Story » General, General Re: deleted

    Hey Jackle! I'm here to review. :) First off, this is really interesting. I didn't read your other, apparently related post, but by itself this is great anyways. Mistakes underlined, ...

    Jun 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: No more power

    Hiya, Hobbit! I'm here to review. Well, I think you have a good start towards a nice poem; your first two lines, for example, flow nicely and have a great ...

    Jun 1, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Lost

    Pacific! Hi! I'm here to review. So, I really like this. You provide great imagery for me to work off of, such as the words "cerulean" and "vast." Overall, I'm ...

    May 31, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: A Suicide Note

    Hi Lakegirl! I have to say, your poetic skills belong to someone far beyond your age. Every line flows into the next, and each individual idea is well thought-out and ...

    May 31, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Finis. Exit.

    Hi Melrose! I'm here to review. I have to say, the more I think about this poem and read it over again, the more I like it. Your use of ...

    May 31, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: A last dance in darkness

    Hi Dante! :D I'm here as requested. Okay, first off, I'm not quite sure how this is fantasy. The only thing I can see about it that might make it ...

    May 31, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: the withering flower

    Hi, Eli! :D Hm...I agree with Snoink: This is a good start, but might need a little tweaking. a snow-white blossom with a ring of silky petals. You do realize ...

    May 30, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Fixing Ruth

    Hey there, Casey! I'm here to review. I'm not going to go into nitpicks too much; it's not really important, and anything I might have said about them has already ...

    May 29, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Hermes

    Hi Aristotle! I'm going to have to agree with Elinor on this one; nothing about this really works for me. At first I thought that this was just some bizarre ...

    May 28, 2010
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: James Bond.

    Bond movies = WIN! Haha, I love Casino Royale...one of my favorites. I guess you, me and Hope make a trio, huh Ben? ;) Never read any of the books, ...

    May 27, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Darling

    Hi Jon! I'm here to review. Well, I have to say, I think you have a great start here. I love how you put action into your poem by using ...

    May 27, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: 3. Awakening to a Mad World

    Hi AM! I'm here to review. Well, I'm going to be honest with you and say that I didn't like this. I feel that it needs a lot of work; ...

    May 27, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Lamp

    Hi there Fairy! I'm here to review. First off, I like your idea. It's very entertaining and somewhat different from the norm. However, I think the way you formatted this ...

    May 19, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: A Midnight Walk Through Zombie Park: Chapter One

    Hi there! I'm here to review. :D First off, I'm with Esther here; I really liked this! It is fast paced and exciting, which is great for me. I like ...

    May 15, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Brazilian Fruit

    Irie! This was awesome! I mean, completely original for sure. Great work. :D I'm not going to go much into nitpicks or any of that, not that there was much ...

    May 14, 2010


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