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Re: Spilling
Hi there, Hannah. You always blow me away with your imagery. This poem is no exception. It's lovely. There are only a few things that I would consider changing if ...
Feb 4, 2013 -
Re: Where The Angels Can Gape
Hi there, Gee. That last stanza is so beautiful that I had to say something about it at the beginning of the review. My, oh, my. This poem is about ...
Feb 4, 2013 -
Re: Too close
Hi there, Courtney. Welcome to YWS! This is an interesting concept. I think, however, it should be converted into a more poetic form if you're going to say it's a ...
Feb 4, 2013 -
Re: Glasses to Glasses
Hi there, Aley. I love the idea. It's got a lot of ways to play with it. I especially love the description in the second stanza, and the last two ...
Feb 4, 2013 -
Re: The Wordsmith
Hi there, Sparkle. I enjoyed reading this. It was a nice little poem about writing. Your rhyme scheme wasn't annoying (and that's something, coming from me (rhyme schemes usually enrage ...
Feb 4, 2013 -
Re: Down the rabbit hole
Hi there. Welcome to YWS! I like your ideas here, and I'm glad I decided to read this poem. When I saw the title, I was a little leery; it's ...
Feb 4, 2013 -
Re: One O'clock in the Morning
Hi there. Ah, love. The gut-wrenching, heart-pounding, sleepless feeling that consumes all in its path. First things first. You have potential here. It is very basic, and very cliche, but ...
Feb 3, 2013 -
Re: To Clean Where You Sit
Hi there. Okay, the imagery here is fabulous. I love it. It's very focused. You keep one image (the machine boy) fairly constant throughout the whole poem. I feel like ...
Feb 3, 2013 -
Re: We Are Finite Beings
Hi there. That first line is lovely. It's such a beautiful image. I love the idea of your poem, but I wish that the whole poem kept with the beauty ...
Feb 3, 2013 -
Re: What Is Love?
Hi there. I strongly suggest changing the title of the poem. No matter what, when I hear (and when many others hear) "What Is Love?" They immediately think of the ...
Feb 3, 2013 -
Re: Elven Grief
Hi there, Bard. As I promised, I've come to review your lovely poem. I love your images throughout the poem. They make it feel very personal. That being said, I ...
Feb 2, 2013 -
Re: Bird
Hi there. I like your ideas. I especially love your last line. Ripping the sky from her wings. Love that. What a great, impossible image (I love impossible images). That ...
Feb 2, 2013 -
Re: Why?
Hi there. Whenever I read your poetry, I find that I really enjoy it. I love your images, though I think there could be improvements made here. The biggest issue ...
Feb 2, 2013 -
Re: My hands were tied
Hi there. I really enjoy this, especially your imagery. It's fevered and crazy, just the way you portray yourself going through "poetry withdrawal." There are a few things I would ...
Feb 2, 2013 -
Re: An Addiction of the Mind (16+ for mature themes and mild language)
Hi there. (You should probably put a trigger warning in the description along with your rating.) (you've used the wrong "your" in the fourth line) Now that that's out of ...
Feb 2, 2013
