Morrigan

Hello, there. I don't think you put the whole story up. It ends mid sentence. And just as I was getting into it, too! I think your premise is quite ...

Hello, PebbleToad. I found many of these a little funny, but really, I encourage you to actually write stories, rather than saying, "I can't do this because this is too ...

Hello, I think your style is nice, and that it definitely could grow into something. That being said, there are a few things I'd like to talk about. 1) I ...

Hello, Dracula. Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. I think that your style is very nice. It's readable, and it allowed me to just be in ...

Hello. First of all, welcome to YWS. Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. You need to break this up into more sentences, more paragraphs, and more ...

Hello, theironnovelist! I really like this. It's slow and brooding, with appropriately barren images, void of civilization with only the wilderness to sing a funeral dirge. That being said, there ...

Hello there, CzystAlmaviva! Welcome to YWS! It's always good to see new faces around. Here is my honest opinion. It's filled with good intentions. This poem, while a love poem, ...

Hi there, Pan. This is nice. It's romantic. It's honest, I feel. But it doesn't make me feel anything. I can feel the honesty, but it's not executed in a ...

Hello again, AndrewRayne, This is the best I have read from you yet. You let it come out slowly and beautifully, like the scent of a rosebush in the garden ...

Hi inkwell! I really like the feeling of this, how you frame it around boiling water and making coffee. It's like I'm sitting down with an old friend, discussing love ...

Hi there! Usually, I don't like rhyming poetry, but I quite like this. It also has a pretty decent meter, and neither distract from the meaning of the poem, which ...

Hello again, AndrewRayne, I don't really know what to say about this. I feel like it's a bit of a repeat of the last poem I read of yours, identical ...

Hi there, Odd! I read this, and I thought, that was cute. I play video games myself, though not the kind of games mentioned in this poem, and I felt ...

Hello, Pompie! I'm here to review, as you asked. First of all, I suggest you don't use *~ after the fragments, as it changes the tone to something more uplifting ...

Hello there, Dreamy! I really appreciate how you use imagery here. It created a very vivid picture in my mind. That being said, there are a few things that could ...