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Re: I Am A Woman.
I like the message. It is something I completely agree with and I like the force with which you expressed it. However, in terms of writing, this content of this ...
Aug 2, 2015 -
Re: Trigger: Lockdown
Hello! Ah, I hope you continue this story! I liked how you juxtaposed the normality of the day with the shooter. How you dropped in the facts about Cameron's parents ...
Aug 2, 2015 -
Re: Overcoming Naivety
Oh my god. That was amazing. You conveyed such a traumatizing and horrible situation with unparalleled honesty and maturity. I edit for a literary magazine and have read a number ...
Jul 21, 2015 -
Re: Prologue to the Teaser: Heavy
Hello, please see the line edits below: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- This is easily the worst party I've ever been to.
Jun 30, 2015 -
Re: EYEronic
Hello! Line edits are below: -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- I have been wearing glasses since class 6. Now, after 5 years sinc
Jun 30, 2015 -
Re: Two Things That Might Influence Your Child
Hello, line edits are below: --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Parents, listen up. You want a good future for your child, right? You w
Jun 30, 2015 -
Re: In Footies We Are All Made Equal
Line edits are below: The clothes a person wears says a lot about them. Some people dress to be noticed. Others dress to blend in. Many of us ladies dress ...
Jun 30, 2015 -
Re: Alien with Ivory
Some line edits: The infant, being [delete "being"] pushed in a stroller, asked his companion, [colon instead of comma] "Are you sure this disguise is working? Humans are staring." The ...
Jun 30, 2015