Monstrar

I like this story and your writing style. They're both really great. =] I hope you write more, though because I don't really like cliff hangers all too well, and ...

Wow, it's really great. I love the beginning and the suspense at the end. There's really nothing I can say to critique you on, except keep it up. Hope to ...

Hmm, I like it, but at the same time it just kind of whizzes by. It's kind of hard to really get into the story.

That was extremely cute. I liked it, and look forward to reading more from you. I don't have any critque, no more than what everyone else has already said, so ...

Yea, it is good, but I agree with the other person who said to use more description. You want the reader to FEEL the character's emotion, not just read about ...

I like the poem, but for me at first it was hard to actually get the "feel" of it and get a rhythym going. I like your basis and the ...

You in there care, there should be their It's well written and very poweful. Just watch little grammar mistakes here and there

To be honest, it's pretty interesting. I get the story, but like someone else said it is kind of choopy as well. Maybe try and add a bit more detail??

It's pretty good, but a little confusing as to who's talking sometimes.

I liked your story and I though tit was good. Just work on a few spelling errors here and there. Keep it up =]