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:] Hey there WrittenInStone, This was a great poem! Well done! I'd just suggest you explain a bit more how the blind man can see, I was left to wonder ...

Hey there Nightlyowl, For something you came up with now, its not bad! Though it did leave me in some confusion... It starts off well, where you mention they are ...

Hey Mickeystwin33, I think you can do quite a bit with this poem. Firstly, maybe just use this as a basis or foundation to build on. The concept is good, ...

Lumi, Wow. Romance really is your thing, isn't it? This was so simple and smooth, and you got out everything you need to say beautifully. Actually, it was just a ...

Hey sarahjane97, This was pretty good. I think better structure is what's needed in this poem. So, having lines that are around the same length and lines that are more ...

Hey there irsyad23, I like your concept for this poem - the environment and its declining sanity. It's different, yet still relates to the world today. So good on you ...

Hey talkingbird, Wow. Let me get my constructive criticism out of the way first, before I spill out my love for this. Just a little note, with the (very few) ...

Hey annaseale1998, Really sweet poem and it flowed well - for the most part. I do agree with Grif though, that the repetition at the end of the stanzas breaks ...

Hey again LittleLionWoman, This is definitely a dramatic poem, and it was clear to see where you were going with it. It was good that you had a source to ...

Hey bailecielo, Great imagery in this and I liked the rhyming too! I'd say throw heaps more feeling and emotion into this, describe your feelings more, it'll create a deeper ...

Idraax, This was one of the most beautiful things I've ever read. I think I teared up a little during the first three stanzas - I haven't felt that connected ...

Hey LittleLionWoman, This was really great. Maybe consider reading over it and re-wording some of your lines for better flow. Otherwise, it was a fantastic expression of emotion and it ...

Hey LittleLionWoman, It's pretty good so far. I like where you're heading with it. But it does need to be longer and you need to explain thoroughly what you mean. ...

Hey firewriter, This was flawless, I thought. It had the right amount of expressionand feeling, and you got out all that you needed to say. I thought the length of ...

Hey Amberchelli, This was so great and a little different to what I've previously read. My only critique? Just watch your grammar in some areas, know when to step back ...