Misty

I know how that is. Character development is hard. Sorry, I got pretty behind on this story. I like it so far, and it's pretty good. for some reason, I'l ...

I can be. And I'm still waiting for more of this story!

nope. that was like...a sort of half-awake thing where I saw myself looming over the "pool of insanity."

ty, great advice you guys.

thanks you guys so much for the crit. And here's something I wrote with the same imagery in mind...but different. I don't know if I like it or not. Insanity ...

uh, no it's different, very much so. BUt thank you. I only wish that MORE PEOPLE would crit this. :shock:

you're welcome. I love books like that. But with the whole Jesus thing, well I actually have a habit of adding, "loves you" whenever someone says that around me. It ...

It's nice, and I think it flows well. Good job!

thanks and I get your meaning. :D

haha it wasn't suppossed to be funny at all, but I kind of see what you mean. I have "past perfect" tense a lot because she's suppossed *sp?* to be ...

Lynn. I meant Lynn. Misty Lynn. Although Misty Kynn is an interesting name...sort of like Misty Skye. I like that name too. Sorry about that!

Well, it's definately interesting, but it sounds more like a list than a story. It's like, "I did this, then I did that, then I did this..." if you know ...

I'm sorry for being completely ignorant, but what are those? yeah I know I'm a sophomore in high school and I don't even know what an adjetive is...blah blah blah ...

I think you're right. I just read through it quickly and I was like, "whoa, that's confusing" and it's never seemed confusing before. Ty!

Honestly, I liked the beginning, but the rest didnt' hold my attention. I don't know why. Good job though, I guess. Well, I didn't like it. I can't put my ...