Misty

Oh dear. It started off so promisingly, and then it ended up being a rant about not smoking and so on...and what is, according to Stephen King, rule #1 about ...

Sounds like one of those cheesey bulletins you have to repost on Myspace otherwise you don't care about life or small children and amy's ghost will knife you from under ...

Hey. Startling idea. Not saying it hasn't been done before, but I'll critique. LINE EDITS Lenore commenced strolling down her street. Certainly not a good way to start it off. ...

"own" or "owe," in that last bit? This is highly unconventional, but it kept me interested enough to keep reading, which is unusual. It's more of a short story, I ...

Ehhhmmm...Well I will echo what you said about the first paragraph of my story: make it more interesting so it drags your reader in more, because it's kind of boring. ...

Heya, it was o.k. :) You're quite prolific lately. Good for you. I liked this sunflowers have thorns? The descriptions are lovely, I especially like the part about the sunflower ...

Ooooohhhh back talk is not good. We do not talk back to Snoinkus, uhh uh. That's a good way to stop getting reviews FAST. And defensiveness is ugly. Actually this ...

Hi hon. Capitalize your "i's" or it seems sloppy. And get rid of all the teen angst, it isn't working. I am encouraged to see that you haven't been fussed ...

I was expecting something great from this. Nice job, you delivered. He inserts the charger: in, out, in, out. It feels very good after such a long day. I am ...

GENERAL NOTES First off, I'm discouraged by the fact that kitty said you haven't edited this much from the last time. That's no good. Hopefully you will change or utilize ...

As if to sing, “I’ll be here forever,” “when the night grows feral and bitter, I’ll be here.” I absolutely adore this, and the title. The rest, alas, is too ...

-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- We had the world, you and I. It was ours, our very own, and we did with it what we wanted We got older, though- not by

GENERAL SCATTERED NOTES AND OTHER WHATSITS Hey there Raven! Well, first off, I see you're new here (cheers and hello)! A good thing to do when you're new is lurk ...

Hey Kitty! (I should really know your name by me or something to chat it up). You, as I have noticed, are a mad critiquer on the boards (45 last ...

Your first line is really awful. It's sad, because the first line made me not want to read this the first time through, and there are some worth-while things in ...